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Friday Fictioneers: The Other Side of the Beach

 

 

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I have really missed Friday Fictioneers these past few months. I find that when I participate I feel motivated to be more active with my blogging. I hope you enjoy. Please share your thoughts.

The Other Side of The Beach

word count: 100

“The hotels on the west side are full,” Todd told Nancy.

Nancy swatted at a swarm of mosquitoes.

“This resort is abominable.” She wrinkled her nose and stared at the substandard surroundings. Why was she surprised? Todd has always been cheap. The mosquitoes buzzed incessantly. She assumed this would be the trip. 

Todd led her through beach detritus. Nancy’s stilettos sunk in the sand. He crouched down, assumed the position. The mosquitoes hovered.

“Nancy…”

Pledges of passion fell on oblivious ears.

Tears of disillusionment leaked. 

“…pawn shop ring…” he boasted.

Nancy welcomed the biting and suffocation of the mosquitoes.

 

 

 

 

 

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11 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: The Other Side of the Beach

  1. Run Nancy Run! Turn those stillettos & head for high ground, Girl!
    Or take them off, beat him senseless & let the tide do the rest. Just a thought…;)

  2. Amy, I think she should decide right then whether or not to invest any more in this relationship. He’s not going to change. Good story and well done. :)

    Susan

    • It’s interesting that readers are sympathetic to her concerns. I don’t like her character and think she is hung up on what others will think or say. Thanks for reading!

  3. Ugh, my skin is still crawling from those mosquitoes! Very vivid (a little too vivid) imagery you painted there! I was quick to sympathize for her as well (maybe I was just distracted by those bugs), but after reading it a few times, I do realize that she seems possibly superficial and not like a very down-to-earth person. Gosh, now I’m feeling bad for Todd! Wonderful story with several layers! Could’ve done with less mosquitoes though. :P

  4. Anyone who wears stilettos on a beach doesn’t start with the sympathy vote from me. I wonder if Todd is really cheap or thrifty. Maybe he can’t afford more. But she seems to be concerned with the value of everything. I agree that the relationship is done, though. :-)

    janet

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